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Nowdays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. Fo the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world، having
children
 later in
the
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people's life is a decision that they make more compared to the past. I think
,
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 the benefits of
this
 decision outweigh its drawbacks. On the one hand, having
children
in
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 older ages increase the risk of some illnesses. Women
decide
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 to expect a baby over
their
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30 years old have more serious diseases
such
 as heart attack and paralysis.
This
 makes the lifespan of mothers and babies shorter, but the progress of science solves
this
 problem. Another issue is
generation
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 gap between
parents
 and
children
. When
parents
 and their
children
 are from
different
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a different
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generation
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generations
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, they understand each other
difficulty
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, and understanding between them goes down.
However
, there are many educational workshops that are used by
parents
 and they can update themselves.
On the other hand
, older
parents
 are more mature. As you become older, you make better decisions because you have more experience in comparison with the young. With more experience, we make
less
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 mistakes.
Moreover
, older
parents
 succeed more in their jobs. So they earn more money and their high salary has a direct impact on their
children
's future. These
children
 get a lot of
opportunity
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 for being more successful compared to other
children
 because of their
parents'
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parent's
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 money. I think, being
parents
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parent
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 is a significant responsibility for any human, and we must provide almost everything for someone
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that
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 we decide to give birth. If you want to be great
parents
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, your earnings must be high for updating yourself and supporting your child. In conclusion, nowadays, being
parents
 in all the rages have a lot of advantages that outweigh
disadvantages
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 because of being met and earning more money. 277 words
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