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Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsiblefor bringing the children up.

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Whether to have a
child
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 or not has always been a very difficult decision for people, mostly because of the responsibility of
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 choice. There is a statement, that women, who are solely deciding whether to keep the babies or not, should raise them for themselves. I believe, that people who are saying that
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 completely wrong.
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 with, pregnancy lasts normally for nine months and through
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 time women are having major changes in their bodies, which can lead to different health problems.
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, it is not easy to live a normal life during that time.
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, morning sickness, headache, backache, indigestion and heartburn all these problems are commonly faced during pregnancy.
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, there are a lot of cases, when there were complications during the process of childbirth and it can even lead to death. Some time ago a woman in Poland was refused in making an abortion and got blind when she was giving birth to her third
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. The point is, that all these things are happening to women, not men. As the matter of fact, right after the baby was born, it has a special connection with the mother, who is feeding it by breath-feeding, but
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, when the
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 starts growing, the father plays no less in its life. Actually, when the parents are not paying attention to the
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, it can cause trauma, which will interfere with future relations.
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, both parents should be responsible for the person they made. In conclusion, we can not deny, that the role of a father in bringing up a
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 is crucial, but only a woman can decide if she wants to have a baby.
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, the dad must participate in the upbringing
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 as much as the mother.
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