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Some People think that the increasing use of computers and mobile Phones fo communication has a negative effect on Young People ready and writing skill I Do you agre disagree or disagree

#people #computers #phones #fo #communication #effect #skill #agre
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 that more
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 of computers and
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This
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. I disagree with the
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. To commence with, computers and mobile Phones can
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enhances
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 through different social media
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. To be
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, through
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people
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club house
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 is the best social media
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in
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 with different
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As a result
, the technology
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. Yet another Point to be noted is that
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the
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writing and reading
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people
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Phones which help them to learn new words
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these days
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better writer and reader
However
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People
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lazy head because of the assistance
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is Provided by various
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intelligence
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 a chance to write their essay without any trouble because of
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Communication
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People
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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 and electronic
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gadgets
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 can reduce the
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communication
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communication
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, I think that through
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