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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree.

#accessibility #university
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The line graph gives
the
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apply
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information about how many tourists
visiting
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visited
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 a Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017. In general, the number of tourists
all
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went up to some degree, and the
quantity
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number
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 of
visitors
 who stayed on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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 was a little more than the
visitors
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number of visitors
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stayed
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who stayed
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 on
island
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the island
an island
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 in 2017. Obviously, there was a significant increase in the number of
visitors
 staying on cruise ships, which increased from less than
0.5millions
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0.5 million
 to
2millions
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a 2millions
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, during the whole period, exceeding that of their counterparts who stayed on
island
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the island
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 after 2015.
Moreover
, there was a
slightly
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 rise of
0.75millions
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0.75 million
 in the
quantity
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number
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 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
an island
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 between 2010 and 2015, after which it fell to
1.25millions
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1.25 million
 until 2016, followed by another
increased
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increase
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 back to
1.5millions
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1.5 million
 in 2017. The number of
visitors
 who like staying on
island
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the island
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 became the smallest over the period from 2010 to 2017.
In addition
, a smooth upward
tend
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trend
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 occurred in the amount of total, which increased from 1millions to 3millions.
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