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EXPERTS BELIEVE THAT, OVER THE NEXT DECADE, ROBOT WILL BE DOING MANY OF THE JOBS CURRENTLY DONE BY HUMANS. DISCUSS THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF THIS

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It is thought that robots will do many things
instead
 of
people
. I am going to shed some light on the disadvantage of
this
 statement. First of all, In globalization, Robot plays an indispensable role in an abundance of industries
such
 as the automotive industry and the cleaning business.
Thus
, some employees have been laid off by many companies during the
last
 year.
For example
, Toyota fires over a thousand poor labourers and the workers aren’t given reasonable compensation.
Therefore
,
this
 action has incredibly affected the household economy.
Additionally
, many
people
 try to tackle the problem of lacking a healthcare provider by using AI to reduce the cost of running a hospital. Despite the ability to replace what the person can do, it still lacks emotions
such
 as sympathy and empathy.
For example
, in some investigations, injection and mental consulting
in particular
, using AI to do
this
 many
people
 can be endangered from
this
 action so
this
 investigation is irreplaceable by automaton since in the past of mental,
people
 have more and more empathy than the cyborg.
To conclude
, over the next decade, in the past of doing something
people
 can do better than automation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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