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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. what are the advantages and disadvantages for buyer and online companies?

#people #buyer #companies
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today’s
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 world buying online has been
a
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 interesting issue for
people’s
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people
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. In
this
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assay
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essay
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 I am going to show the pros and cons of the given issue. On the positive side, recent research
have
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 shown that people are not waiting in
traffic
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a traffic
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 jam to go
the
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 mall or street markets
instead
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 of that they click on
phones
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their phones
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 and save
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time . On the other side , they can read the comments the
people’s
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 write , like price and quality they are satisfied or not . On the other hand , people have diversity in choice . Some of the online shops have
product
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a product
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 return
guarantee
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guarantees
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 if you do not like
the
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anything buy , you can
brought
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 back to them.
On
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One
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 the
on
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one
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 of the most point is you have access always what you need
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at
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anytime
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 of
day
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 .
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 in the holidays not open all of the shops and I can go to
mall
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the mall
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 and buy clothes but I can buy clothes online
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 On the negative side , you can not test the clothing material or wear , if buying online . you have to pay for postage
witch maybe
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which may be
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 expensive.
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 in buying online
do
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does
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 not have enough security because it
maybe
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may be
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 a scam .
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last
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 month I bought
a
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shoes
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pair of shoes
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 but when I pay the cost they do not send to me the shoes
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 in conclusion from my perspective, the benefits of buying online certainly outweigh the
draw back
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drawback
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