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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language cause seriosu social problemsi as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#country #language #seriosu #problemsi
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Nowadays,
people
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 residing in different nations hard contrasting views about
this
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 statement.
World
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 globalization increase strictly nearly
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last
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the last
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 two decades. If we compared
to
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it to
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 the past,
mostly
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most
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humans
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 born somewhere live
in
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apply
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there and die where they
born
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were born
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.
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However
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 now
World
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 is a very big town for mankind to live
on
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in
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it
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apply
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. So most
of
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the
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apply
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humans
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 connect with each other so
people
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 speak
different
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a different
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language
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languages
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 and
this
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 may cause social or practical
problems
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 in life.
This
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 essay shall touch upon
this
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 statement and find out my view.
To begin
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 with,
World
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 changes so much in
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last
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the last
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 two decades. New inventions
about
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in
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 communication, transportation and technology caused
to
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apply
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globalization.
Humans
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 can live wherever they want all around the
World
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.
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However
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,However
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people
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 can not always adopt the
language
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 where they live. They have one
mother
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language
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 but you have to know another
language
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 to communicate with
people
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 effectively. But most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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humans
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 can not talk like their
mother
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language
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 and it caused serious
problems
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 in society.
For
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example
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,example
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people
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 who migrate
another
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to another
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 country always complain about missing their homeland,
actually
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,actually
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 they miss their friends, families and they miss
talk
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talking
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 in their
mother
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language
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 and
understand
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understanding
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people
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 in that way.
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,
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this
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these
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people
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also
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 caused
socail
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social
problems
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 in their lives. They can not explain themselves properly so they get
harm
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harmed
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. They
struggel
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struggle
struggled
 in their social lives.
For
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example
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 they will be alone in there. They can not reach everything quickly. There
is
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are
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 a lot of disadvantages
of
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to
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 not being understood. In a nutshell,
speak
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speaking
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 a different
language
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 which is not
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mother
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the mother
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language
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 can cause
a
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apply
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very important social and practical
problems
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. In my
view
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,view
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 I agree
to
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with
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this
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 statement because
speak
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speaking
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 a foreign
language
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 is
very
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a very
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 difficult thing and
also
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 usage of that
language
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 is the
most
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hardest thing in the
World
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 because of that using
second
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a second
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language
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 can cause serious
problems
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.
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