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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

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In recent years, It has been hard to adjust the balance of
work
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 and
life
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 for
people
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 around the world. In fact, there are specific reasons. In
this
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 essay, I will elaborate on the culprits and proper solutions.
To begin
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 with, it is a well-known fact that working hour is too long in many countries.
That is
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 to say,
due to
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 extended working days,
people
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 should spend most of their
life
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 at
work
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, which inevitably leads
people
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 to lose their own
life
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 in various parts.
According to
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 a survey, the Japanese,
for instance
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, dedicate themselves to their duties over 55 hours per week, which is higher than OECD recommended. It is perceived as a negative social issue in Japan.
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, the low wage is another factor to suffer from an imbalance of
work
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 and
life
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.
In other words
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,
people
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 squander more
time
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 earning appropriate income. As an example, many developing countries,
such
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 as India, and China, still have difficulties managing their personal
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 properly because of insufficient pay. When it comes to solutions, governments should implement a law with respect to working hours. Thereby ensuring, governments allow the public to flourish in their lifestyles.
This
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 is exemplified by the USA which introduced 4 days of service system in
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 of the coexistence of
work
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 and
life
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. In return, the act makes a splash not only among employees but other countries.
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, personnel's salaries should be increased. It is a fact that once
people
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 gain considerable wages they will find a way to coexist
work
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 and their
lives
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.
For example
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, teachers and nurses in New Zealand have hardship because of that issue for a long
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.
However
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, after demonstrating for a year, they could have increased their income and gotten back to their
lives
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. In conclusion, on account of long working hours, and not enough wages
people
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 have a hard
time
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 imbalance between their
work
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 and
lives
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.
Thus
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, governments should make feasible efforts with policies to reduce
work
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time
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 and increase wages.
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