The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.
The
bargraph
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bar graph
compared data about the number of hospital
beds
per
thoasand
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thousand
of the demographic people in seven
countries
and the table illustrates information
the
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amount of money which was
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by the government of
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thre
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three
countries
such
as
Japan
,
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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and The US.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
Japan
has more
beds
per number of their population with about 14 per one thousand than other
countries
in the question. After that, Germany got the second position with just under 8
beds
for their population and
then
, other
countries
are in
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range approximately with 4
beds
. Another interesting point is that the US has
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more than three times of
Japan
for
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health
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system, and after that the Netherlands with almost half
amount
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of money from the US is second.
However
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life
expetancy
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expectancy
of
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japan
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is more than
others
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the others
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. looking at the details, as regards Canada, Spain and the United Kingdom are below than 4
beds
of
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per thousand and the Netherlands and Australia are near to 4
beds
with a little more and a little less respectively.
Japans
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Japan
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with 14
beds
and Germany with 8
beds
have the most
carying
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caring
varying
carrying
health systems.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beds, countries, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • healthcare resources
  • life expectancy
  • per capita
  • modern medical equipment
  • correlate
  • accessibility
  • average lifespan
  • healthcare policies
  • government healthcare spending
  • disparities
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • global health inequalities
  • technological advancements
  • telemedicine
  • AI diagnostics
  • health outcomes
  • public health initiatives
  • vaccination programs
  • preventive healthcare
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