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Many people believe that social networking sites have huge negative effects on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over recent years, the use of social networking
sites
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 amongst all age groups has been constantly on the rise. Some
people
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 argue that these
sites
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 have
greater
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 negative impact on both individuals and society.
This
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 essay agrees with
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 statement as in today's world most
people
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 have become addicted to looking flawless.
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,
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the population
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population
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populations
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 across all age groups using these
sites
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 are inclined towards taking pictures of every moment of their life and showcasing
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 the world.
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, most
people
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 who use social networking
sites
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 on daily basis post pictures of themselves, inviting comments from their audience.
Due to
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this
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, the users undergo pressure to look perfect and use various apps to apply filters and effects to make them look appealing in anticipation of receiving positive comments.
Moreover
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, the social networking apps
such
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 as Instagram come with
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 face correctors and edit tools encouraging their
auidence
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audience
 to
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into
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 looking perfect .
Therefore
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, the
sites
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 are encouraging the audience to develop a negative
mind set
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mindset
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 towards their own self and natural looks.
On the other hand
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, it is observed that
people
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 now are more focused on capturing every moment of their life and posting on the
sites
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 rather than living in the present and enjoying the moments.
For instance
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,
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 pictures of
toddlers
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toddlers'
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 first walk have become quite famous and a viral theme on the internet.
Thus
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, resulting in parents being interested in taking images
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 of enjoying that moment with their child. In conclusion, the
sites
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showbusiness for even
commonman
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common man
 to project an alternative no drawback image of themselves and a means of displaying life events with no emotions impacting
people
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 in a negative manner.

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