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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.
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The bar chart provides information about the share of the population who hold
science
 qualifications in
Malaysia
 and
Singapore
.
Overall
,
people
 in the two countries who had no quality in
science
 dominated on a large scale,
whereas
, to
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, there is a low percentage of citizens who hold a Master's and Bachelor's
degree
.
It is clear that
 the two countries have a significant difference in the proportion of
people
 who hold a Bachelor's
degree
,
while
 the number is 20% in
Singapore
however
 it is a mere 10% in
Malaysia
.
In addition
, the level of school leaving exams in
science
 is slightly higher in
Malaysia
 than in
Singapore
, where about 35% of
people
 have a
science
 qualification and in
Singapore
 is 5% lower. The key feature that emerges in Master's
degree
 and
people
 who had no qualification in
science
. There are less than 5% of
people
 in both countries who have a Master's
degree
 and
in contrast
, more than 60% of
people
 have no qualification in
Malaysia
 and
Singapore
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science, malaysia, singapore, people, degree with synonyms.
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