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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, people all around the worl still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Although
 there are a lot of developments in agriculture fields, many individuals across the world are struggling with hunger. One of the main problems is income distribution, where only a smaller portion of society has access to good living conditions,
in addition
, the poorest tend to suffer more and more to stay alive. I agree with
this
 statement and I'll discuss it in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, the world has become a capitalist place to live and the more
people
 earn, the more important they are.
For example
, in many countries around the world,
people
 only earn about twenty dollars a month to feed themselves, which is impossible to support their families.
In addition
,
according to
 CNN Brasil, at least 30% of citizens are below the poverty line and tend to eat only rice and beans, and many cannot remember the
last
 time they ate a piece of meat. To be honest, in many ,countries the governments don't remember the
people
 who are needed. Regardless, some authorities usually create some social programs only to feed them with basic foods thinking to the election. Brazil is a wonderful example of it, where
people
 usually are humble and believe some providers are an unbelievable help. In my opinion, social programs are extremely important but they can be the only way to provide food for poor individuals. To be honest, the correct way to offer improvement for poor
people
 should provide education as well. In conclusion, hungry is a huge problem for several societies and many can help those who are in
this
 sad situation,
on the other hand
, only those who could solve at least part of
this
 problem are the politicians. Unfortunately, humanity usually has good and helps each other frequently.
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