Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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life
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balance is
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topic in lifestyle magazines. The more you spend
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for
work
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, the more you
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lose
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time
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for chilling and
rest
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. Long hours
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working have
both advantages and disadvantages,
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its drawbacks are more. In
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I will write two
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benefits
and three
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weak points
of working till wee hours.
People
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gain some benefits from working
consistantly
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consistently
.
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, they earn more money
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in jobs which
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paid hourly.
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to
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workload,
this
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is the
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best
option for
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who are under economic
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pressure
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, in
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job
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jobs
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,
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as managing,
people
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get more credit. The
time
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you spend
for
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your
work
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means
hou
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how
much
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position means to you and
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commitment. Apart
all
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advantages, there are lots of disadvantages which make
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work
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work-life
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life
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balance issue a crucial topic.
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, working too much affect every
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of
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human
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,
due to
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lack of
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,
body
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the body
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does not have enough
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to rest and recover. Even if you be physically active in
work
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time
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, there should be some spare
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for doing different
movement
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compare to
work
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Furthermore
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,
people
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who
work
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too much usually miss family and friends gathering which is a perfect
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for communication, sharing emotions, expressing love and experiencing new feelings.
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Finally
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lack of
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fore
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for
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leisure activities resulted in increasing personal, sexual,
physical
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and physical
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problem
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problems
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. One of my friends who is a president of an innovation factory with
high
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a high
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salary,
suffering
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suffers
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ferom
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from
feeling
loneness
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because he
addicted
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to
work
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and doesn't
knw
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know
how to enjoy his free
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in
case
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.
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it has a huge
affect
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on
life
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.
To sum up
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,
although
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,
peole
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people
can get credit and high income, the impact of working hard
on
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apply
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physical
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physically
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,
loosing
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losing
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communication skills and
increasing
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an increasing
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number
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a number
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of different
problem
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problems
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in
life
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outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
the disadvantages of working for long hours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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