The charts below show the percentage of electricity consumed by different sectors in Eastern Australia in 2007 and 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of electricity consumed by different sectors in Eastern Australia in 2007 and 2010.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of
electricity
consumption by various
sectors
in eastern Australia in 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, consumption of
electricity
in various fields shows
similarly
in both years except for other metals, aluminium and manufacturing.
Additionally
, the figure for the residential and commercial
sectors
consumed more
electricity
in both years. In 2007, the residential and commercial
sectors
were the leading sector to consume
electricity
with 28% and 23% which was above half. The manufacturing and aluminium
sectors
are the third most
electricity
consumed
sectors
with 13% each.
Whereas
figures for other metals and mining were slightly lower with 12% and 9% respectively. There was only a minimal amount of
electricity
consumed by transport and agriculture with 1% each. In 2010,
while
the
electricity
consumed by other metals rose significantly by 6%, those of the manufacturing and aluminium sector fall down with 9% and 11% respectively. The consumption of
electricity
in other sector shows similar to
an
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initial figure.
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