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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicnes and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Introduction
people
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 have had
different
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a different
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concern
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concerns
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 when it comes to
talk
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talking
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 about
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health
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a health
the health
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problem
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. It is said by several
person
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people
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 that
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of
health
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issue
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issues
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people
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 are trying
alternative
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of
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apply
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medicines
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 and treatments rather than
visitng
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visiting
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thier
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their
the
concern
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 doctor.
while
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 many believe that
alternative
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of
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apply
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medicine is
right
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the right
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 option,
according to
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 me
alternative
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treatment
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 cause many issues. it
have
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 both pros and cons which
i
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 explain below in
this
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Body paragraph 1
on the one hand, nowadays
health
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increases
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 day by day
due to
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poluted
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polluted
 surrounding for that
socieity
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society
 prefers
medicines
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 and
treatment
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 to fight
againts
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against
health
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problem
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,
it
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which
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 can cause many serious
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problem
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problems
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.
for
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instance
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according to
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 the survey of Times OF
India
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,India
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proven
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proved
have proven
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 that taking
inappropiate
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inappropriate
 medicine without
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a doctor
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doctor
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doctor's
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 concern causes many side effects.
usaully
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usually
people
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 are
more busy
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busier
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 in their life so they
dont
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don't
 have enough time to
meets
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meet
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doctor
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the doctor
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.
this
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 can be
negative
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 development.
Body paragraph 2
on the other hand
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 , many
person
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people
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 takes advice from doctors for
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thier
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their
health
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problem
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.
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this
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 can help
people
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 to save
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thier
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their
 lives and money. taking
of
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irrelevent
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irrelevant
relevant
medicines
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 without concerning doctors cause many other
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health related
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health-related
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issue
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issues
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.
Conclusion
in the conclusion, several
people
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beleive
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believe
 that consuming
alternative
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medicines
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 and
treatment
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 helps them to fight against
health
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problem
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whereas
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 others
prefers
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prefer
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 doctors for
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thier
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their
the
treatment
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 of
health
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 issues.

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