Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicnes and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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when it comes to
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about
health
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problem
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. It is said by several
person
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people
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that
increasing
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number of
health
issue
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people
are trying
alternative
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medicines
and treatments rather than
visitng
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visiting
thier
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their
the
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doctor.
while
many believe that
alternative
of
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medicine is
right
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option,
according to
me
alternative
treatment
cause many issues. it
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both pros and cons which
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explain below in
this
essay. on the one hand, nowadays
health
issues
increases
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day by day
due to
poluted
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polluted
surrounding for that
socieity
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society
prefers
medicines
and
treatment
to fight
againts
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against
health
problem
,
it
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can cause many serious
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.
for
instance
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according to
the survey of Times OF
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that taking
inappropiate
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inappropriate
medicine without
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a doctor
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doctor
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concern causes many side effects.
usaully
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usually
people
are
more busy
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in their life so they
dont
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don't
have enough time to
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doctor
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.
this
can be
negative
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development.
on the other hand
, many
person
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people
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takes advice from doctors for
thier
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their
health
problem
.
this
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can help
people
to save
thier
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their
lives and money. taking
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irrelevent
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irrelevant
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medicines
without concerning doctors cause many other
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issue
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. in the conclusion, several
people
beleive
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believe
that consuming
alternative
medicines
and
treatment
helps them to fight against
health
problem
whereas
others
prefers
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doctors for
thier
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their
the
treatment
of
health
issues.
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