The chart below give information about the high-speed continuous internet connection of households in five countries in 2001 and 2002

The chart below give information about the high-speed continuous internet connection of households in five countries in 2001 and 2002
The bar chart and the table show the high-speed
internet
connectivity of households in several countries in a 2-year period from 2001.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that,
while
Britain experienced a dramatic change, South Korea showed a tiny fluctuation.
Furthermore
, the
internet
connection in the USA had the highest figure in 2002
whereas
Germany witnessed the lowest number. In 2001, South Korea had the most high-speed
internet
-connected households, at 122 per 1000 individuals,
while
the United States ranked second at 93
connections
. High-speed
internet
connections
were much less common for Britain, Switzerland and Germany at 3.3, 3.6 and 3.4 per 1000 people respectively. It can be clearly observed that the number of families with high-speed
connections
in the US climbed by 170% to 252.1
connections
per 1000 people, roughly double that of South Korea in the same year. Meanwhile, despite a change of 230%, only 10.89 per 1000 people in Britain had high-speed
internet
access by 2002.
In addition
, the figures for Germany and Switzerland were only 5.616 and 7.92 per 1000 individuals respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, connections with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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