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The US film industry has too much influence on the film industry around the world. Governments have a duty to invest money in their own film industries to protect and develop their cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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North American movies have been leading the ticket sales around the Globe since the first cinematographic frame was made. US films have influenced other countries to invest in their own productions.
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, it does not mean that Nations have to do it in order to protect and improve the development of their
culture
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. I disagree with that perception because is more a knowledge issue than a social one.
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, the North American film industry is the biggest generator of movies in the world, they have the ability to produce any story and become a piece of art through cameras and computer effects.
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, recently was released the second part of Avatar's trilogy, the biggest challenge was to reproduce on a computer the essence and science of water effects, and they invested quite a money to achieve that goal in the film industry.
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, they obtained astonishing profits and the acknowledgement of the community and critics. In consequence, is hard for a
country
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 which is starting in
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 field to get the same results.
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, they have the media to produce stories but not the ideas, most North American productions are based on books or inspired by cultural aspects of a
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.
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, Pixar production obtained an Oscar Award for the best-animated movie called 'Encanto', that movie shows off the
culture
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 of Colombia and explores different traditions with an attractive story.
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, the Government of Colombia did not invest any money,
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 achieved a strong desire from tourists to visit the
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. In conclusion, I disagree with the statement that Nations have to protect and show their
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 through their own production. They have to foster the
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 and tourism
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 US directors focus on how to display that
country
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 with a story since they dominate the industry.

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task achievement
Ensure clarity and precision in expressing ideas, particularly when discussing the influence of the US film industry and the government's role in protecting cultures.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the link between the main points and supporting details to enhance coherence and cohesion.
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Avoid generalizations and aim to present balanced arguments to support your position effectively.
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The essay provides relevant and specific examples, such as the success of 'Avatar' and 'Encanto'.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, establishing the writer's position on the subject.
coherence cohesion
Main points are generally well-supported with examples.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Americanisation
  • Cultural imperialism
  • Local cinema
  • Cultural diversity
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Film subsidies
  • National identity
  • Artistic expression
  • Blockbusters
  • Cultural preservation
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