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The goverment is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the goverment is wasting money and should spend money addressing the problem of public.

#goverment #money #life #planets #people
Nowadays
the
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space and the exploration of
the
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other planets are
one
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some
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 of the most popular research
topic
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topics
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. Famous
componies
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companies
 and governments are investing
money
 to support
the
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technology and everybody
believe
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 that they will find some new useful things.
For
example
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 a new place where we can live. It
seem
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 to be a good business with
a
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enourmos
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enormous
 benefit but like in every risky
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thing
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things
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 it is possible that
at
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 the end we will realize that the whole process was
a
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wasting
money
. I agree that we have problems int
he
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 Earth which are important and
necessery
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necessary
 to solve them. For instance
in
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the
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developing countries
develope
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develop
 health care, stop starvation and globally
is to
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protect the
enviorment
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environment
.
Other
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 hand the space
reserches
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research
 are helpful
to modernized
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in modernizing
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 our life and
invent
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inventing
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 new technology tools or
discover
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discovering
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now
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new
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 things. My opinion is that we can spend
money
to
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 both of them
in
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the same time. The constantly growing population require
to
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us to
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 find
new
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a new
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 place where we can live because our planet has a space- and nutrition limit.
Moreover
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 during the
exploration
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exploration,
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 we can discover new elements or
built
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build
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 new electric devices which will
helpful
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be helpful
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 in our everyday life. We haven’t got too much information about astrology but
this
 is the best reason why we should invest
money
 and
corrected
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this
 defect. In my
conclusion
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 we need to invest
money
 in the Earth and
also
 in the other planets exploration. We shouldn’t concentrate
to
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 one thing because we
wont’t
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won’t
 develop or just really slowly.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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