The Chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. 

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph above illustrates the percentage of
coffee
buying, whether it is the fresh or
instant
type, including the consumption ratio of
coffee
and tea in cafes in five locations in Australia within the
last
4 weeks. Namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart. The data for each survey object is varying in all five cities.
First,
when we look in general, the proportion of Australians that choose
coffee
shops is consistently higher than other observed events across five cities.
On the contrary
, the smallest percentage belongs to the category of people who purchase fresh
coffee
.
Then
, in the middle of them is the category for
instant
coffee
.
Secondly
, when we analyse thoroughly, only Adelaine’s report isn't similar to the rest.
Instead
of getting their
drinks
from
coffee
shops, making their own
drinks
is preferable for them, specifically
instant
drinks
.
However
, the gap between
this
choice and the rest isn’t far away, only less than 5%. In conclusion, each resident of Australia has various preferences for types of
drinks
. Namely, beverages from
coffee
shops, making
instant
coffee
and brewing
coffee
beans.
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