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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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People hold different views on whether
children
 should learn the literature and
history
 of their own country or other
countries
. As far as I am concerned I completely disagree with
children
 only learning
history
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 of their own nation. In
this
 essay, I will give reasons for my opinion. First of all, only studying
history
 from their own state could limit their understanding of other
countries
. Not only will their knowledge be limited, but there will
also
 be some unwanted misunderstandings which easily lead to conflict between the citizens from different regions. For a long time,
this
 could potentially result in a terrible war. An obvious example is that in the distant past, there were many wars caused by the misconception between different
countries
 which resulted in the loss of money and people, and most of that was caused by the lack of understanding of world
history
.
Furthermore
, learning the
history
 of other
countries
 can greatly improve
children
's cognitive skills.
This
 is because, they are able to learn new words, and languages,
in addition
 to learning about the diverse lifestyle of other cultures which is really useful for them to enrich their vocabulary and grammar skills, and they can
also
 improve their critical thinking and analyzing skills by comparing different works of literature. In conclusion,
while
 many individuals may argue that it is more important to teach
children
 the literature of their own country, it is evident that the
history
 of other nations may bring many valuable benefits to
children
as well as
 the development of their own country.
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