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The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.

The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.
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The given map depicts some information which is about developing a city located in HCM during a 28-year period from 1995 to 2023.
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 as it can be ostensibly seen, the rural area is more residential than before with fewer trees and the changes are dramatically noticeable. There are major improvements in the construction and infrastructure of the city. The shops had been converted to restaurants
as well as
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 the fish market below them after the road has been converted to new apartments
while
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 the fishing port had been demolished completely.
It is clear that
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 the forest park and the farmland had been flattened to build a new tennis court and golf grounds during these years. With the development of the residential parts of the
region
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 there has been constructed a car park next to the hotel.The extent
in
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 the west road and housing near that should not be underestimated.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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