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The diagram shows how ethanol is produced from corn

The diagram shows how ethanol is produced from corn
The diagram provides information about manufacturing ethanol from
corn
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that there are some stages and it is started from planning
corn
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 and eventually delivering
to
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it to
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gas
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the gas
a gas
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 station. A closer look at the diagram illustrates that the
fist
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first
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 process is begun by planting the
corn
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 as well to get the best of
corn
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.
Afterward
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, the
corn
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 is stored in the building which is
close
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 rooms to measure the quality of
corn
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 and
then
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 it is
grinded
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ground
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 by machines in the factories.
Next,
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the sample from the milling stage
is soak
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on
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in
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the
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apply
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water and cooked by machines. After
splitting
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the splitting
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 process, the sample is fermented in the drum
during
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for
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 48 hours. The next process is to separate
between
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apply
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the liquid and solid product which the liquid would be filtered to obtain pure ethanol.
Finally
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, the product
that
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is attain
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is attained
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 would
delivered
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be delivered
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 to
gas
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the gas
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 station by truck and ready to use.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words corn with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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