You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- years old child. write a letter to the parents. In your letter -explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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My name is Amandeep Singh and I am writing

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letter in response to an advertisement published by your manager. To give you a brief detail about my academics, I have completed my social well-being course at Humber College.I believe I can be a perfect fit for

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role because of the qualifications I possess. Talking about my professional experience, I was enrolled with CARE NGO for almost a year where my job was to take care of kids. My hard work and dedication to my job got me certain certificates from the administration team. As soon as I heard that there is an opportunity to volunteer with the six-year-old child, I couldn't resist sending you an email. I would be grateful to you if you consider me for

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position. If I got a chance to be a babysitter in Australia, I would love to enrol myself on a short-term music course. I have heard from my friend that Melbourne music school conducts various classes on music and gives certificates to the participants which are recognised worldwide. If you need any

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information please feel free to connect with me over email. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Amandeep Singh.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

203 words

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The Greeting

in many countries, paying for things using mobile phones (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?