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In many cities,many people are living in large apartments blocks.Does this accommodation have more advantages and disadvantages.

#cities #people #apartments #blocks #accommodation
Nowadays, a number of
people
 are living in huge
building's
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buildings
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 flat and
this
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these
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trends
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 are going to
contunie
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continue
. In
this
 essay, I
wil
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will
 argue
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of living
buildings
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in buildings
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. First of all,
i
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 want to explain some advantages
living
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of living
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 in
apartmens
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apartments
 and there have been immense advances
living
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large
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in large
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 apartments.
People
, who
living
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live
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 in
apartmets
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apartments
 can easily do their housework
effordless
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effortless
 even if
their
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there
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 have some useful
facilitities
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facilities
, and renting an apartment building is
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more acceptable
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acceptable
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cheper
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cheaper
 than
own
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owning
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 a house, and it
do
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does
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 not exist any real estate taxes.
Moreover
, I would mention that in these
establishment's
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establishment
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 utilities are much cheaper than a house.
Secondly
, there
also
have
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a lot of disadvantages and
people
everyday
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every day
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 have been facing
this
 kind of
problems
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problem
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. One of them exactly must be
traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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 in many developing and developed countries, because it doesn't allow them
get
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 to their work
at
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on
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time
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the time
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. In
additionally
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, if we
living
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live
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 in
buldings
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buildings
, there will have some noise
such
high
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as high
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 music and crying child sound, laughing
people
.
As well as
 sometimes
people
 can not find any spare space
putting
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to put
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 their
stuffs
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stuff
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 and
it's
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its
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reason
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the reason
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 is that
people
 prefer to live
small
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in small
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place
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places
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 and it tent to create a new problem.
Furthermore
, the most major issue is parking and in
last
 times
this
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has lead
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lead
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led
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 to some
a
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apply
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new
issue
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issues
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 between neighbours. In
conclude
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conclusion
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,
in
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apply
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this
 topic has lots of pros and cons and both of them are really essential and if we want to live in
a
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an
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 apartment flat, we have to pay attention
where
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to where
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 we want to live.
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