The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The graph indicates the
number
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of people who travelled to a Caribbean
island
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from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, there was a significant rise in the total
number
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of visitors to a Caribbean
island
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.
In particular
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, the
figure
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for visitors on
cruise
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ships
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showed the most significant change over the seven-year period. In 2010, the
number
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of vacationers on
cruise
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ships
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and on the
island
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began at 0.25
million
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and 0.78
million
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respectively. The following year, the
figure
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for
cruise
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ships
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rose slightly to 0.5
million
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,
while
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the
number
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of visitors on
cruise
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ships
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remained unchanged. From 2013 to 2015, the
figure
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for tourists staying on the
island
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remained stable at 1.5
million
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. Between 2015 and 2016, the
number
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of people staying on
cruise
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ships
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surpassed that of the
island
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. Over the following two years, the
figure
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for
cruise
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ship passengers reached a peak of 2
million
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,
while
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the
number
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of tourists on the
island
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fluctuated around 1.5
million
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. The total
number
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of tourists rose gradually from 1
million
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to 3.5
million
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throughout the entire period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, figure, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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