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Some feel that individuals should have the right to strike in all jobs while others feel there are exceptions. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#feel #individuals #right #strike #jobs #exceptions
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Some people are of the opinion that employees ought to have the
right
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 to
strike
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 in all
jobs
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whereas
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 a majority of
folks
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 strongly believe that there are exceptions. I personally hold the view that there are some sorts of
jobs
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 that are excluded
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 vital responsibility and
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 dependency.
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, there are a large group of communities who believe that there is some position
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 extremely important in society and
everyone
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's
life
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 depends on them.
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, some
jobs
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such
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 as firefighters, and police officers are important in all communities.
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, they do not have the
right
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 to
strike
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 because there are like a hero to all
folks
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 who trust the
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, there are responsible for social safety and if they want to seek more welfare they are not in a good position.
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 to the important responsibility that they have
life
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 dependency is another irrefutable reason not to argue about these
jobs
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. to clarify, nurses and doctors are good examples of them.
everyone
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 expected them to save their
life
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 when societies have faced with some
life
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-threatening situation.
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, during the pandemic when all
folks
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 panicked the only ones that we trust were doctors to fight the disease.
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, from the begging they knew that they are working in a not profitable position so, they do not have the
right
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 to argue about it. Some
folks
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 may claim that all workers have the
right
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 to
strike
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 about their activities
due to
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 the equal welfare that
everyone
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 should have in society.
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,
this
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 group think that there are not any exceptions because
everyone
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 needs encouragement to do their job in the best way.
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, what
this
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 everlasting and troubling condition yields cannot be overlooked.
to conclude
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, some think that individuals should have the
right
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 to
strike
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 in all positions
while
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 a large group of people and I firmly believe that there are some exceptions
due to
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 the main reason for those activities and reliability.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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