The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph above illustrates how many
people
visited the Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017 and their staying places.
This
data specifically depicts
people
who choose to stay on cruise ships,
island
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, and
total
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of both categories. In general, there is a significant increase in the number of tourists in
this
period. The highest peak of growth belongs to the cruise ships group because the number in 2017 adds up
eight
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times from the earliest year in 2010.
On the other hand
, the portion of
people
who preferred land only multiplied approximately two times.
Then
, when we looked more in detail regarding the land group, there was a stagnation era from 2013 to 2015 with 1.5 Millions
of
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visitors.
This
pattern only appeared in
this
category and it can be safe to assume that in these years
people
started to like travelling in the Caribbean on cruise ships.
However
, it didn’t make a clear impact on the total group line because it continuously rose up from 2013 until 2015.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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