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Demand for oil and gas is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity.do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The demand for oil and gas has been growing with the surge of world population and industrialisation. Some
people
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 suggest that
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exploration
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 in rural and undeveloped
areas
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importance
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 to maintain the
fuel
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 supplies. In the rest of
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 essay, I will demonstrate the pros and cons of giving my opinion. To commence with, it is beneficial to execute
fuel
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 prohibition in rural or undeveloped regions. There are many undiscovered
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 supplies across continents
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 under the seas. The supply of oil and gas is the crux to determine the stock markets around the globe as
people
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 and businesses rely heavily on fuels for daily life and operations. It is mandatory to explore
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 supply of oil and gas in rural and undiscovered regions.
Exploration
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 for
fuel
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 sources in obscure
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, aside from that, can save
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 from
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 to the toxicity made during
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 extractions. As
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 explorations and extractions require machines to probe underground,
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 may detrimental to the building structures if it operates near the urban regions. In turn,
people
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's daily activities and business will be affected. In turn, it is recommended to undergo
fuel
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exploration
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 in distant
areas
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 and
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undiscovered
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.
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, we should
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 pay attention to the sequela brought by
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exploration
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 and extraction, especially in those undiscovered and remote
areas
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. As multitudes of
fuel
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 supplies are being discovered and used,
fuel
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 becomes precious and rare. The lessening in
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 supply can cause price
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 in
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 run, which increases the financial burden for
people
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. By way of conclusion, it can be foreseen that
,
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fuel
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exploration
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 in rural and undiscovered
areas
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 is of importance and a must to maintain a sufficient
fuel
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 supply. Never should we waste the
fuel
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 supply prodigally.
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