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Many things that use to be done in the home by hand are now being done by the machines. Does this development bring more advantage or disadvantage.

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The effects of
machines
 have recently been brought up in controversy, whether or not they serve more good than cause harm. Household
machines
,
such
 as coffee makers, dishwashers, and laundry
machines
, have simplified our daily routines.
However
, overusing these
machines
 comes with several drawbacks. In
this
 essay, we will cover both sides of the debate. These days, most
people
 have a tight schedule for the day. They leave for work in the morning.
Then
, return home exhausted at night. These
people
 could benefit from
machines
. Not only do they save time, but
also
 they help preserve their energy too.
Moreover
, studies have shown that the majority of dishwasher owners are married.
This
further
 supports the idea that
machines
 help save time and energy.
In contrast
, like many other inventions,
machines
 come with a number of drawbacks.
Firstly
, producing these
machines
 causes waste, which leads to landfills overflowing with unwanted plastic.
In addition
, said
machines
also
 have safety hazards. Plus, with over four-hundred cases of death by electrocution reported in the US each year, users should use them cautiously. Nowadays, household
machines
 are replacing jobs
such
 as housekeepers and lawn care technicians, making these
people
 jobless.
Furthermore
, recent research has presented that there has been an inverse relationship between the number of machine sales and homeless
people
. Though
machines
 come with several drawbacks, I believe they would benefit humanity in the long run. With newer models having more good than harm, I predict that most of our daily routine would have been done by household
machines
. In conclusion, we should invest in research and machine development for our greater good.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Time-saving
  • Precision
  • Consistency
  • Carbon footprint
  • Resource depletion
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Expenditure
  • Physical exertion
  • Sedentary lifestyle
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