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Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#city #life #countryside
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Certain groups today have argued that living in an urban
city
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 has more advantages than rural.
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 essay completely agrees with
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 viewpoint because
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 in the
city
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 has more benefits for living not only more
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 but
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 obtaining great opportunities
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 as education. One reason why
life
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 in urban
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 is may acceptable for
life
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. Because
facilities
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 in the
city
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 have developed all year
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 why they can provide comfort for the user.
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, in Thailand, a recent study found that the first reason why
people
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 in the
countryside
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 moved to live in urban
areas
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, numerous
people
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 responded that
facilities
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 as transportation can make easy for
life
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 more than in the rural
areas
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.
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, in the
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countryside
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 there is a lack of development of
facilities
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, which is why
people
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 who live in
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 area have to find new
areas
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 and save money to buy new houses in urban cities. In Thailand, houses particularly in the
city
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 were the highest brought . Another reason is that
people
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 who live in the
city
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 can obtain greater opportunities than
people
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 who live in the
countryside
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. Most of the top
schools
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 are located in the
city
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areas
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 so
that is
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 why children in the
city
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 may obtain acceptable education.
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, the majority of students who have studied in school in the
city
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 have scored tests colleges than students who studied in rural
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, as found in a recent study.
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, the
facilities
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 in
schools
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 in urban
areas
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 have more
schools
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 in rural
areas
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 because
schools
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 in the
city
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 have more budgeting than
schools
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 in the
countryside
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. In conclusion, living in urban
areas
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 benefits more than the
countryside
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 because in the
city
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people
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 can obtain convenient
facilities
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 as transportation and great opportunities to study in the greatest school.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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