Differences between countries are barely evident these days. Everyone in the world is wearing the same brand and watching the same TV channels and movies. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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Everything is changing around us every single day
due to
globalisation.
This
is because many people are trying to catch up with the latest fashion in order to look fashionable and modern. When it comes to watching the same movies we are trying to get insights into them and learn a lot of things about culture and their tradition.
Therefore
, I do believe that we are losing cultural identity somehow. Putting on the clothes under the same brand gives people the to boast and show off wealth.
This
means the community tend to wear fashionable clothes to brag about how good they look or how rich they are.
However
, it leads to losing cultural identity and probably it might forget about their past. When it happens, the crowd might not be aware of their past and their ancestors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homogeneity
  • unity
  • connectivity
  • cultural diversity
  • unique traditions
  • global influences
  • loss of identity
  • individuality
  • positive impacts
  • negative impacts
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