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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie chart shows the destinations chosen by
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graduates
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 and it is categorized into six sections.
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, the table below the pie chart shows the salaries of
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graduates
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 after five years of
work
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 experience. The table is separated into four different ranges of salaries and compares three different fields of
work
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. More than half of
Anthropology
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graduates
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 started
full time
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full-time
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work
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. Fifteen
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percent
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 of
graduates
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 preferred to
work
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 part-time.
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, five
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percent
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per cent
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 preferred part-time
work
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 and postgraduate study together. Some of the
Anthropology
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graduates
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 could not find a suitable job or postgraduate studies. These kinds of
graduates
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 account for twelve per cent. And there is no information about eight
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percent
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per cent
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 of
Anthropology
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graduates
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.
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, the total number of
employees
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are
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is
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 seventy-two
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percent
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per cent
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.
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, thirteen
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percent
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per cent
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 of
graduates
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 studied in a postgraduate course. The table shows that the rates of the freelance consultants and the government sector
employees
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 are close to each other at different ranges of salaries. The
employees
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 of the private companies earned more than the other two types of
employees
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, ranging between 25.000$ to 74.999$ . Specifically, they earned over two times in the range of 50.000$-74.999$. But in the range of 75.000$-100.000$, the other two types of
employees
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 had much higher wealth than the private companies
employees
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words anthropology, graduates, work, percent, employees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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