It is often said that the government spend too much money on the projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problem that are more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Many experts believe that the government is exorbitantly allocating money to sustain wildlife,
while
others counter-argue that other major issues need to be solved.
Although
both views sound rational, I think that more public services-related problems should be addressed and solved. My point of view with appropriate examples will be justified
further
. On the one hand, it is obvious that wild animals are a precious part of our world and a biological cycle. Some animals,
such
as the white tigers that are only found in Bangladesh, are on the verge of extinction. So it is of utmost importance for the state to finance the forestry department.
Moreover
, if the finance department
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funding forest security departments, it
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be
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for prayers to kill creatures in the forest, and businesses related to selling skin, bones and teeth
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be increased. Escalating lucrative profits in
such
businesses would lead more and more people to kill and destroy wild animals and their habitats.
Thus
, financing for building sanctuaries or zoos can help tackle these issues to a large extent.
On the other hand
, in
this
fast-paced and cutting-edge technological world, improving basic public services
such
as schools, hospitals, roads, and bus stops is crucial.
Furthermore
, these common amenities will save people's time as time in commuting will be less. Many under-developing countries, like Pakistan, have inferior conditions roads that
further
create huge traffic jams and accidents. If people
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easy access to hospitals more likely in emergency cases a patient would be saved.
Also
, nearby schools always refrain students, especially juveniles, out of
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by travelling from and
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to
school. In conclusion, it can be inferred from the above arguments that even though taking care of forest critters is vital for the world as a whole, investing money in the betterment of the public and their services will be more comfortable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystem
  • Human welfare
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Resource allocation
  • Cost-benefit analysis
  • Non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • Ecotourism
  • Sustainable development
  • Preservation
  • Endangered species
  • Habitat destruction
  • Climate change
  • Environmental stewardship
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