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Band 4

Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There were some experts who believe that when a
country
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 is already wealthy and rich,
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 enlarge in
economics
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 wealth
wouldnt
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wouldn't
 make the citizens
anymore
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any more
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 gratify, I absolutely disagree because any additional enlarge means the rise for both the
nation
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 and
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people
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the people
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, Which will help the
country
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 throughout the journey. Additional increase in economics will provide the
country
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 with a lot of income which will open new
path's
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 for greater things and will help with the development of the
nation
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it self
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itself
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 and the
people
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 because the
improving
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 of life facilities will improve the living and
inteligence
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intelligence
 of the
people
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 which will
also
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 provide good education, increasing income will
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 contribute to the
reaissance
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renaissance
resistance
 of the
people
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 and increase the workforce, And can be one of the 10 top leading
countrys
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countries
country
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will
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well
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. A
country
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who's
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that's
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 already rich and developed should not be held back from
achieveing
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achieving
there
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their
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 goal, there are no limits to evolution the richness and
the
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apply
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development of the
nation
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 the safest and the
most
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apply
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greatest way to keep on
achieveing
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achieving
 the best results and
the
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apply
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strengthening the capabilities of the
people
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, The increasing of the
country
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 resources
strengthns
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strengthens
 the
people
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 resolve and it helps more to unite the
people
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 . In
conclusion
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 there
is
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 no limits for a
country
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who
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that
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 wants to keep on developing
it self
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itself
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, And if they are
togther
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together
, the
people
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 and the leaders of
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 will awaken the
nation
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 and reach the summits , Evolution has no limits they only need two things determination and resolve .
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