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Write an essay about the advantages and disadvantages of fast food.

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A vast variety
in
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 cuisines
are
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 easily available these days. Amongst all, street
foods
 are generally
most
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 favoured and
comes
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come
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 in different
varities
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varieties
.
However
, the consumption of fast
food
 is linked with
plethora
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 of merits and demerits which are elucidated in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, there are many advantages of eating street
foods
.
Firstly
,
road side
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roadside
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 eatables are available in different
varities
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varieties
 which caters to the need of varied taste buds of people. Masses, especially youngsters, easily
gets
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 bored with regular meals and always look for alternatives
of
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 homemade suppers'.
Secondly
, street
foods
 are readily available in the
vincinity
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vicinity
 of most dwelling places.
Due to
 affordability and availability, people
those
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who cannot cook
due to
many
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any
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reason
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 of hectic
schedule
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schedules
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 and fast-paced
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 can
also
 satisfy their hunger.
On the other hand
, fast
food
 is
also
 termed
as
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junk
food
 because of its nutritional value and detrimental effects on an individual's health. These types of
foods
 lack the elements of a nutritional diet which can lead to nutrition deficiency if consumed for long on regular basis.
Moreover
, it is scientifically proven that high consumption of fast
food
 is making people obese and is
further
 linked to malignant diseases. To recapitulate, fast
foods
 should be consumed once in a
while
 to
statisfy
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satisfy
 the cravings in limited proportion.
Healthy
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 body makes
the
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 healthy mind and only healthy
food
 can make us fit.
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