Some people prefer to travel by car while others prefer to take the bicycle. Which of these do you prefer? What are the advantages and disadvantages of traveling by a car and a bicycle?
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mode
of transport available for locomotion from one place to another . Among Fix the agreement mistake
modes
them
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,them
bicycles
are economical Use synonyms
as well as
environment friendly, Linking Words
while
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cars
are expensive and create harm to nature, but it provides Use synonyms
safety
and Use synonyms
save
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saves
lot
of time. For the reason of safe Change the article
a lot
travel
, I prefer Use synonyms
cars
for transport and Use synonyms
this
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and
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type
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types
travel
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system
.
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systems
bicycles
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doesn't
need any fuel consumption for travelling, so Change the verb form
don't
that
they are not exhausting any type Correct word choice
apply
for
harmful gases Change preposition
of
to
the atmosphere. Another positive factor is that riding on Change preposition
into
bicycle
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a bicycle
provide
enormous health benefits for riders Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
such
as reducing Linking Words
the
overweight and booming blood circulation . Correct article usage
apply
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example
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,example
the
studies reveal that cycling reduces the risk of heart attack Correct article usage
apply
as well
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as
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an
effective
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an effective
technique
to burn fat. Fix the agreement mistake
techniques
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hand
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by
travelling in Change preposition
apply
the
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a
car
, it provides Use synonyms
provides
speed and Remove the redundancy
apply
safety
for Use synonyms
the
people. The modern technologies Correct article usage
apply
which
used in the latest edition are giving more importance Correct pronoun usage
apply
for
safe Change preposition
to
travel
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in
roads,where accidents and deaths usually Change preposition
on
happens
. Change the verb form
happen
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car's
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cars
ensuring
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ensure
a
comfort and relaxation Remove the article
apply
while
travelling for long journeys and the facilities like audio playing and air conditioning Linking Words
give
an immense amount of entertainment during the journey. Change the verb form
gives
Overall
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bicycles
have more health benefits and they are environmentally friendly , Use synonyms
where as
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whereas
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car's
give speed and Change the noun form
cars
car
safety
.
There are certain disadvantages Use synonyms
for
both of these Change preposition
to
travel
modes . Use synonyms
Firstly
the Linking Words
bicycles
can be used only for one or two per at a time and they are getting tired very quickly after riding for Use synonyms
particular
distance. Add an article
a particular
Hence
it cannot be used for commuting, because the person is exhausted after long physical stress and cannot concentrate on Linking Words
job
. Add an article
the job
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, Linking Words
due to
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need
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the need
of
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for
lot
of balance ,Change the article
a lot
bicycles
are very porn to accidents in windy weather and Use synonyms
not
convenient in Add a missing verb
are not
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the rain
rain
season .On the other side Replace the word
rainy
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car's
need plenty of fuel for Change noun form
cars
travel
and need regular maintenance for Use synonyms
its
proper operation , Correct pronoun usage
their
as a result
, it can cause a financial burden Linking Words
over
the users. Change preposition
on
In addition
to that Linking Words
cars
are not worthy for transport of a single person and it can create a rush in public places where parking slots are restricted. Use synonyms
Finally
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over use
of Correct your spelling
overuse
this
can boom the effect of global warming by producing huge greenhouse gases Linking Words
to
the atmosphere.Change preposition
into
on
the whole Correct your spelling
On
bicycles
are not providing enough Use synonyms
safety
and Use synonyms
it
can only use Correct pronoun usage
they
according to
the weather conditions, Linking Words
while
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car's
are expensive and Change the noun form
cars
car
harm
to the environment.
In conclusion,Replace the word
harmful
bicycles
provide certain health and economic benefits, but Use synonyms
not
suitable for Add a missing verb
are not
long
and Add an article
a long
the long
multi person
travelling. Add a hyphen
multi-person
Use synonyms
Car's
provide safe and comfortable journeys, Change noun form
Car
whereas
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it
can be expensive and escalate global warming. I prefer to Correct pronoun usage
they
travel
in Use synonyms
cars
, Use synonyms
where
gives priority Correct word choice
which
for
Change preposition
to
safety
and It is my first choice .Use synonyms
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