Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meet can cause health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

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,
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about ecology, study our mental health and do
sport
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. The
last
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sport
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– yoga, groups, stretching, plays,
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, gym, pool
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etc. We know
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does us healthier, stronger and
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. But I
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want
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won't
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provide
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between the positive and negative sides of
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the sport
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. Of course, it is difficult to
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, that
sport
does to us something bad. It helps people, who want
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weight. Or it is relaxing for desk-dwelling people who work a lot
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in the office. It
also
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our mental health.
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says, that ‘’ exercise causes your body to release endorphins, the chemicals in your brain that relieve pain and stress. It
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reduces the levels of stress hormones, cortisol and adrenaline.’’ So, it helps with depression, does sleep better,
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disorders.
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, we should save
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focus
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on a hard
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we will expose to get
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and failures. Especially, if it is an extremal
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jumping from high or
a
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hiking in the mountains. I believe, that the minuses of
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are more about professional
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. In my opinion,
the
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children who
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went to
the
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professional
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, haven’t a normal life. They concentrate on
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to be
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better than other and
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in competition every day. It is
also
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because it requires hard-working every day
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exercises and checks on strong exposure. In conclusion, I would say that the pluses have more weight
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the minuses. Indeed, in our life
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us to look and feel better. But we should think about risks and do
sport
measuredly.
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