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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discus both views and give your own opinion.

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At the moment,
due to
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, numerous financial problems not only one parent can be the breadwinner, but
also
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 both
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 have to be involved in making money.
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, there has been a debate over whether it is the grandparents' responsibility to take care of their grandchildren,
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, others suggest that in
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 situation, childcare institutes can be more helpful. I personally confide in the latter idea. the following essay will negotiate both views entirely.
To begin
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 with, it is highly recommended by experts, that a newborn offspring should be under
parents
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' protection up to a certain
age
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 to let them grow older in a kind and safe ambience,
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, in special ,circumstances
parents
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 are not capable of accompanying their children up to that
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. In
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 cases, grandparents must be more helpful and trustworthy, as long as they are physically able to deal with a newborn minor. Admittedly, children need education and a proper relationship at an early
age
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,
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, it can be easily provided by kindergartens rather than grandparents. A survey which has been done at Harvard University
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 released important statistics regarding the best time for a child to attend the educational atmosphere by
age
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 2 years old.
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,
parents
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 must meet their child's needs by looking for the best place for their toddler to receive the best care there. In conclusion,
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, there is no specific way to raise a child perfectly, it's the parent's duty to find the least detrimental way to rely on and follow with regard to their kids, which can help them be better people in the future.
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