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The table highlights data on the number of travellers using three major british airports between 1998 and 2003.

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The table provided information on
a
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the
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number
 of
passengers
 using three main airports, namely
Heathrow
,
Gatwick
, and Stansted, in the United Kingdom over the six
years
 period from 1998 to 2003.
Overall
, what stands out from the table was, three airports received an increasing
number
 of travellers towards the end of the period in question with different patterns. Among the three of them,
Gatwick
 stood out as the most preferred destination over the six
years
, except in 2000,
Heathrow
 was receiving more
passengers
 than the rest. In 1998, standing as the lowest of all,
the
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Stansted
airport
 was only getting 17.3
million
 travellers which
were
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was
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 approximately
two
 times less than
Gatwick
 and almost 10
million
 less than that
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of
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Heathrow
.
This
airport
 reached its peak in 2001 with 43.3
million
 and has remained at the same level over the new
two
years
. From 1998 towards 2002,
Gatwick
airport
had
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received an increasing
number
 of
passengers
 gradually with 3 to 5
million
years
 on year,
then
 suddenly in 2003, the
travellers
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number of travellers
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 surged by 20
million
.
Heathrow
Airport
,
on the other
hand
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 got 48.2
million
 in 2000 and became the top
airport
 in that particular year compared to the other
two
 airports. In the following
two
 consecutive
years
, the figures dropped gradually to 37.1 and 33.2
million
 respectively,
while
 the others never experienced a downfall in
a
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the
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number
 of
passengers
.
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