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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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people
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youngsters who have good academic records should be provided the places in the
universities
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while
 another
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people
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 high grades at
school
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 viewpoints, before clarifying my own opinion
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 I lean towards the latter. It is understandable why
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universities
 should prioritize opportunities for good young
people
 to follow the advanced programme. One major rationale is that the young have time, enthusiasm and energy to follow their passion.
This
 is because they know they need to widen their knowledge and gain the experience to build their career path in the future. Another driving factor is that university is more difficult and different than high
school
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high marks before it means they have a good ability to absorb and analyze so young
people
 can independently pursue advanced knowledge. Despite the aforementioned benefits, I would opine that concerns regarding
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for all
people
 seem more justifiable.
Firstly
, each person has different opportunities and interests. Vietnamese
people
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 the intelligent can master it. In my opinion, it depends on what
people
 would like to become and the score doesn't say it all.
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 touch the viewers and they mustn’t be good at math formulas. Another thing to consider is that we have different
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 and financial conditions. In fact,
this
 should act as a major precursor for several
people
 who can not apply to the university at the right age. In conclusion,
while
 there is no denying that good juniors should have
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places in
universities
, I am of the opinion that it
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 be imprudent to discount the importance of equality in learning for all ages
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 they have great scores at
school
 or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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