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The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
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A glen of diagrams provides information about the life cycle of salmon from small to large.
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, it is clearly seen that there are three main stages from the upper
river
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 to the open sea. A closer look at the diagram shows that the process started with life in the below
river
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. The salmon egg, as small capsules, lives close to reeds and stones where it spends around 5-6 months. Before going to the ocean, the small fish which produce from under the
river
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 will emigrate to the fast-flowing area to foster to be smolt fishes which have a size of nearly 15 cm. After that, the young fish will look for direction to go and grow in the sea where it will allocate just under 5 years to create fish adults. Eventually, the adult salmon swim to the
river
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 again to spread and keep their eggs when it is like a cycle.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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