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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
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It is undeniable that in the modern-day,
technology
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 has come so far, its effect has a
lot
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 of impact on our lives,
such
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 as
choices
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 of career and accommodation.
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, some
people
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 think that nowadays all of us have too many
choices
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. From my point of view, I do not agree with that idea for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs.
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 with, nowadays, there is an increasing number for a
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 of new young adults that are well prepared for jobs in the future,
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 the places of work are still the same.
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,
people
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 do not have too many
choices
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 about it, and they must have
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intense competition to get good work.
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, my medical students of mine have to study for more than 10 hours per day to get accepted into the workplace by an exam.
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, the need for a career in
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 period tends to be specific for the
people
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 who have an essential skill in
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 because the idea at present is “If we have an officer who has a good skill in
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, our company will be successful easily”.
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,
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 plays an important role in our lives in many aspects and our careers too. So,
people
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 do not have many
choices
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 and have to make them up to date as always.
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, the
choices
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 of accommodation dramatically decreased in the past by the increasing amount of
people
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. Back
then
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,
people
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 could buy or rent their place anywhere, but nowadays are genuinely hard by the number of citizens and demand.
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, a
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 of
people
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 want to live in an urban town because of its high
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 that can make them feel comfortable in their life.
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, they wittingly spend a
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 of money on the price, which is expensive because they do not have many ways to choose, and if they want to live downtown, they have to spend a
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 of their money. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that
people
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 do not have many
choices
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 these days since it seems to me that the significant growth in the number of residents and quality of
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 has a
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 of effect on our lives, and all of those are currently decreasing our
choices
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 to live in everyday life.
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Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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