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It is a natural process that animal species become extinct, as the dinosaurs did in the past. There is no reason for people to prevent this from happening.

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Creatures' distinction has been a normal phenomenon throughout history,
such
 as dinosaurs.
Although
 human beings had not been involved in some vanishing of animals, they would have stopped it from happening. As far as I am concerned, our life is relevant to other kinds of creatures,
Thus
 it is crucial to protect the ecosystem from restyling.
To begin
, it has been proved that change is part of our environment, and it is not a big issue.
Nevertheless
, the thing is the method that makes
this
 event is prominent because everything in nature is connected to each other like a chain,
Therefore
, if one of that chains goes to disappear, it will make a huge disaster.
For instance
, Co2 emissions created by factories and vehicles are the main reason for global warming and
this
 is
due to
 the fact that ice melting happened and leads to jeopardizing polar creatures. On the other side, it has always been phenomena that did not occur in spite of humans,
such
 as volcanoes and seasons changing, and
that is
 the most charming part of life. Changing not only spreads a passion into human life but
also
, paved the way for making people wiser. Sometimes evolution is not happened by human hands, it is a natural activity. The more restyling happened, the more individuals are inspired by those phenomena and get an idea of them. In conclusion, human beings should watch their activities because everything in nature is linked together.
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