The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA.
The given table illustrates metrics about the population in two different age groups, per capita
income
, and the
percentage
of citizens living below the
poverty
line in three states in the United States, namely
California
,
Utah
, and
Florida
.
Overall
,
Utah
has the largest proportion of young people aged under 18, and the smallest rate of senior citizens aged over 60.
Although
, the amount of
percentage
population
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the population
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below
poverty
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the poverty
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line in
California
is higher than
two
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the two
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others
but
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this
state has the highest average
income
per person in
three
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the three
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comparison objects. People under the age of 18
account
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for over a quarter of
Utah
’s population,
while
the figures for that in
California
and
Florida
are much lower, at 17% and 16% respectively. Standing at 23%, the
percentage
of senior citizens aged over 60 in
Florida
is nearly three times higher than
Utah
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. Meanwhile, the figure for that in
California
is 13%. The average
income
per person in
Florida
is $22,000, which is $1,000 less than the average for those in
California
.
Additionally
, the proportion of
the
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apply
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poverty
in
Florida
and
California
are
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12% and 16% respectively. Despite the fact that
Utah
has the lowest per capita
income
at $17,000,
this
state witnesses the lowest
poverty
percentage
, at only nine
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, percentage, poverty, california, utah, florida with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disparities
  • correlate
  • socio-economic factors
  • demographic
  • economic prosperity
  • variance
  • indicators
  • social welfare programs
  • economic development
  • policy-making
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