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Some people think governments are responsible for people’s health, others believe it’s an individual’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the social concerns today relates to the
health
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 of
people
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.
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 it is widely believed that
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 think
governments
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 are responsible for
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people’s
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health
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, others believe it’s an individual’s responsibility. In my opinion, needs to have the commitment of the government and individuals, both have a responsibility to help
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people’s
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health
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 better. On the one hand, it is argued that
people
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 think
governments
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 are responsible for
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people’s
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health
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. The main reason is that
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 contribute to taxes annually. It is
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 possible to say that
governments
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 use
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 money to improve facilities, build more hospitals, and more area communities for
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 can use to exercise and walk in there. One good illustration of
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 is when having many hospitals,
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 can be in ambulances quickly, and avoid dangerously. Another reason is only
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 can release laws to protect and halt activities illegal relates to
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people’s
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health
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.
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, it is strongly believed by others that others believe it’s an individual’s responsibility.
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 often have
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 opinion because individuals need to protect themself, they need to initiative join sports clubs, exercise, diet healthily and care for their
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. A particularly good example here is me, I usually walk every morning and play football, volleyball, and badminton at the weekend as a way to improve my
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, the government can’t call me to wake up in the morning and control my habit, I need initiative. In conclusion, both government and individuals need to be responsible for
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people’s
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health
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 Personally, I tend to believe that an individual being healthier will contribute to a country's development.
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