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the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.

the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.
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These two maps show the same
island
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, the first map is before
construction
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 and the second is after
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construction
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the construction
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 of
same
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the same
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 travelling facilities.   Before the
construction
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, we can only see the sea, the beach and some trees
in
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on
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 the
island
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. And after the
construction
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, added swimming areas, accommodation linked by footpaths and other related travelling facilities.   Looking at the map before it was built, there was a large open space on the
island
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. After it was built, the restaurant and reception were added to the open space, which was connected by vehicle tracks and led to the pier. Tourists can take a sailboat tour, and there are many houses around the reception area as accommodation. The position of the trees after
construction
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 remains the same as before
construction
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.   In general, after the
construction
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, there is a great change compared with before the
construction
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, but after the
construction
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island
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 is more suitable for tourism development.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, construction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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