The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.
The chart illustrates the differences that have happened in three various types of
crime
(burglary, car theft and robbery) in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
overall
, burglary was the highest
crime
until 2007. it recorded the highest
number
in 2004,
while
car theft came in second until 2007. it began to be the most
crime
of three that happened in the city.
Finally
, the robbery came
at the end
with the lowest
number
and even the most stable. First of all,
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break in
crime
was the most common one and it started to arise and reached its peak in 2004 with 3800 accidents.
Then
it dropped until achieved the lowest
number
in 2008 with 1200 ones. it raised a bit
then
and stayed approximately stable.
On the other hand
, thefts that stole cars started with almost 2800 incidents in 2003 and decreased in 2006 to touch the minimum that was about 2000 and continued rising until 2012. It is obvious that the robbery was not very common in the city as they
initiated
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at about 600 numbers and recorded a tiny crease and run to the lowest
number
in 2008 at 500 crimes.
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