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Some people think the government should subsidize fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Other argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that
government
 should remove taxes on fruit and vegetables so that healthy
food
 is more accessible to the netizen.
However
,some individuals argue that the local authorities should tax unhealthy
food
instead
. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on both views and I will give my opinion. In the present circumstances, healthy
food
 has become extremely expensive mainly Bio products which are good for health but are not affordable for poor
people
. The
government
 sensibilise
people
 to have a healthy
lifestyle
 but it is contradictory that a healthy
lifestyle
 is expensive
such
 as gym fees , and vegetables and fruits are not accessible to everyone. So, I believe that the local authority should subsidize healthy products. Though unhealthy
food
 will be subjected to tax,
people
 will continue to eat junk
food
. I strongly believe that the
government
 should have free canvassing to encourage a healthy
lifestyle
.
Moreover
, the
government
 should make sport free and accessible to everyone by creating more gymnasiums and
also
 provide women with children facilities
such
 as free babysitting so that women can
also
 benefit from a healthy
lifestyle
.
Furthermore
, I believe that school and district councils should organise weekly free activities for young
people
 and free coaching as well.
On the other hand
, the authorities can encourage
people
 to produce their own crops by giving them some small courses on planting, giving them seeds and equipment for free. In conclusion, I strongly approve of the idea that health products should be accessible to all social classes.
However
, taxing unhealthy
food
 will not change the bad habits of
people
. The
government
 should provide facilities and educate
people
 on how to stop eating unhealthy
food
 and to produce their own
food
.
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