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You want to sell your mobile phone. You think a friend of yours might be interested to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you are selling your mobile phone. Describe the mobile phone. Suggest the mode of payment to your friend

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Dear Vishal, I hope
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 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I met Aditya a few days ago and he told me that you were planning to buy a new
phone
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 as your old
phone
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 is giving you problems and you are tight on budget to get a new
phone
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. I was
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 planning to sell out my
phone
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 which is an
iPhone
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 14, 128 GB
why
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that
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 didn't colour and is in the best condition. I got
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phone
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 almost 2 years ago on Christmas Day.
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While
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apply
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I have been using
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iPhone
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an iPhone
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 for a long period of time and always wanted to have a flip
phone
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. The Samsung company has recently launched the flip
phone
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, which caught my interest.
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, the flip
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 has the same features as the
iPhone
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.
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, the condition of my
iPhone
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 it's pretty good. The battery life is almost 92%, which is a good sign for a
phone
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. The touchpad and the buttons on the
phone
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 work perfectly fine without causing any issues. Do tell me if you're interested in buying my old
phone
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 and I will obviously give you a discount. If you make a decision to purchase it, you could make a transaction via interaction or pay me cash, and I will hand over the
phone
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 with all the necessary equipment inside it. I hope to hear from you soon your lovingly Nishi
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Task Response
Provide a brief introductory sentence to introduce the main purpose of the letter before diving into the details.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be cautious with spelling errors such as 'why didn't' which should be 'white in'. Consider proofreading to minimize such errors.
Greeting and Closing
The closing is warm and cordial, fitting the context of writing to a friend. It nicely wraps up the letter.
Complete Response
The letter covers all the requirements of the task: explanation for selling the phone, a description of the phone, and a suggestion for payment.
Suitable Writing Tone
The writing tone is friendly and suitable for addressing a friend, maintaining a personal and conversational vibe throughout.
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