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Many scientists believe that seeking out life by sending messages into space is a good idea while others feel that it is dangerous. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Scientists view that sending messages into other universes is considered a good idea to find a place to live,
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 others opine
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 idea is dangerous.
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 essay will examine both perspectives and present my opinion. Primarily, I do agree with the statement that communication with creatures outside of our apple might bring new knowledge to humans about conditions in other spaces.
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, we can access information about planets that have similar atmospheric structures to Earth that are suitable for humans to live.
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, with the current rapid evolution of technology, might not be impossible for us to reach that planet someday, and start a new life there, considering the conditions of Earth are
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 deteriorating, as indicated by lower freshwater, weaker air quality,
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 climate change.
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, as Friedman says, there is not no
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 thing as a free lunch. To access that important knowledge, we might be required to give information about our living planet to those creatures, as an exchange. It might be risky for us to share that kind of information, as we still don’t know what their motives are, how developed their knowledge
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 and how dangerous they are. To illustrate, in a science fiction film, called Independence Day, aliens received a signal from humans and led them to invade our planet, as they have more developed technology and civilization. In conclusion, communication with external civilizations is not a bad option,
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, we have to think about the consequences and plan mitigation action if the worst comes.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider refining your introduction to provide a clearer overview of the arguments that will be discussed in the essay. This will help set the reader's expectations more effectively.
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Ensure that your arguments in each paragraph are fully developed and supported with specific examples. This will enhance the clarity and depth of your points.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to the logical flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs. Using linking words and phrases can help guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
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You have presented a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which is essential for IELTS essays.
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Your essay addresses a relevant and thought-provoking topic, which engages the reader's interest.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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